Grading Essay "R"

While I was reading essay "R" about the WWE I noticed many things wrong with the paper, and many changes that could be done to improve it. While it was not a bad paper, it still has several changes that need to be made. If I was the instructor grading the paper I would most likely give it a C+. The main changes that need to be made to the paper are the amount of gramatical errors throughout it. However, grammatical errors are not the only problems that need to be fixed in this paper. It talks a lot about the wrestlers and the types of things that they need to do. Its ok to talk about things like that if you understand the WWE or professional wrestling. But for the people reading the paper that don't understand professional wrestling, the author needs to explain in more detail what is going on for the reader to completely grasp an understanding of it.
With some work to grammatical errors and the different usage of words this paper could easily become a very good paper.